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Right now I cease to see peace
From a war in the middle east
To disease and poverty
Willing to spill blood for oil
Manufacturing guns with less recoil
Ready to kill
And let their families head for the hills
We give our own kids pills
We drink over caffinated drinks for a thrill
Surprised we have not already all written our wills
Get a GED and only work at the mills
Ignoring all previous skills
We cant stay still
And avoid the ill
Take action and fill the people with truth
Too destroy and loot
Is not the answer
But is too fight
Peaceful and right
Spreading love
On sight
A poem I made(:
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pablour026 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
beautiful poem, im very impress by the words, i am glad that i click on your link.
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
Im glad you clicked on it too(:
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Daikichii Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011
Love the poem. </3 Thanks for sharing. :)
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011
Thanks!(: <3
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xhappybutterflyx Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
I love you and this. It's beautiful like you(:
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
D'awww you's quite cute yourself(:
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xhappybutterflyx Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
heheeheh(:
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MissMushroomX Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
so meaningful I really like this.
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
Thanks yous(:
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LittleGreenPurse Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hmm.. "spreading love on sight" I like that.
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Thanks(:
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LittleGreenPurse Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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CakeMonsterXD Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Student General Artist
i like it ^.^
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011
Thanks(:
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CakeMonsterXD Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Student General Artist
your welcome ^.^
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amazingmemoriesxD Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011
that's reallyyy good!
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:icontedmaniac:
TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011
Thanks!(:
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Vane-Grimskull Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Professional General Artist
this poem is so strong and sends a very important message i love it. :squee:
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011
Hehe thanks!<3
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Vane-Grimskull Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Professional General Artist
your welcome ;)
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truememory Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
deep i know how that feels my mind sees this at night it is my fright my nightmares are earth reality when will it sease to le the world be free from this bottomless hate of this dying fate i fear it is too late we shallsay goodnight an head for the light..

sorry wanna write it it was on my mind
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:icontedmaniac:
TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Very good(:
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truememory Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
hehe thank youuu :3
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DinoLover4Life Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
wow thats actually pretty deep!
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:icontedmaniac:
TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Thanks!(:
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DinoLover4Life Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
np i mean it rlly describes the USA! ewe-b
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
It is, But after
"We cant stay still"
was all inspired by the riots going on.
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SetTheFireToTheRain Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm not really good in english. I speak French so that is hard for me to understand everything, but I understand the main idea and I'm agree with you. The world become really pathetic and we forget what is really important. I hope someday, love will direct the way we live our life. I hope for a better world without war, famine, segregation, etc.

I'm sorry that I can really tell you what I think about your poem, because english is not my first language, so I can judge it, but keep continue to write. I'm sorry for the bad english :(
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Your English was fine, I understood what you meant, and I agree with you too(:
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SetTheFireToTheRain Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks that is good to read ;)
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LearningEverMore Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
First of all, the second line confuses me, too disease? did you mean too much disease?
also the lack of punctuation can create confusion in the reading of the poem in itself. These things kind of distract the reader from the content of the poem and make them focus on the structure, the sentencing, etc.
overall, great job, love the reasoning behind it, great message!
You seem quite mature for how young you look in your photos!
but never mind that,
you should check out my group, ABetterWorld
Your views make me think you'll like it :)
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
It goes, "Too disease and poverty"
as in, They're both problems, Maybe saying "From disease, To poverty" would clear things up?
But punctuation wasn't much of A concern, I was just free flowing(: and yes I am fairly young:b
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LearningEverMore Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
well if you just used "To" instead of "too" that would fix it :)
and yea, I understand not using punctuation, just a mere suggestion :)
well you are quite mature! You'll have a wonderful future if you keep using that big heart and logical mind of yours!
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
I confuse "to" and "too" quite often, So my mistake:b
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Alright, Will do(:
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Eyaru2 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
to bad people are in a hurry to live.. no one wants to slow down and take a look at how terribl things really are... bravo for writing this.. means alot to me this weary soul.
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
Thanks, I'm a very rational thinker, and I like to look at a situation from a different perspective, i was thinking about writing more about countries in danger of genocide, Genocidal alert and such, maybe blood diamond type stuff.(:
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Eyaru2 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
sounds like a good idea.. i use to do alittle writing.. but.. recently ive been caught up into entertainment taht i havnt taken out any time for anything ells.. guess i need to slow down.. i will be keepn an eye out for more of ur work. looking forward to it.
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TedManiac Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
Thanks, A lot of it's different, some funny, Romantic, Issue related, so im fairly malleable with the work(:
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Eyaru2 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
aha, yea, usually depends on the mood XD
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